critiquing my videos is fair enough since i've been fighting people early in the morning. since i'm going to be really busy in the afternoons and evenings, thanks to school, i can't come up a reasonable excuse.
Here are some examples. . . . . these are some of my original characters from my fanfic "LunarFate"; not to confuse you with the RPG game or other counterfeits, my version features some of my original characters + some "Tsukihime", "Fate" and "Kara no Kyoukai" characters. It's kinda of like Onimusha in a sense.
Kilitia (Utan's Sister)
Satsuki & Luvia (LunarFate Edition)
I only have the 1st two stories complete. If you want to read it, it's availiable @ d3sl.webs.com.
Excluding Athena, Sorceress, and Saber looking similar to your originals, my initial vibe from these CAS is simple yet bland version of Fate Stay Night.
FSN is a bit over the top on some anime designs...even simple ones. If I were some random ignorant person who knew nothing of this anime or what you're trying show, I'd write them off as bad weeaboo anime customs that are forgettable.
The thing is, your CAS lack charisma to advertise your fanfic LunarFate. It's just "hi I'm a person with a sword" and not "Hi I'm definitely a Fate Stay Night look alike, but I'm actually from LunarFate". Regardless, keep on posting more and ask for help to improve them.
I'm quite positive I have some supporters for my fanfic "LunarFate"; I was pushing for this to be an actual movie, but it was still imcomplete. I had to start from the beginning; mainly because Utan's character was overpowered in my 1st two stories.