8WayRun Fanfiction: The Writer's Block

Ninjaguy446 said:
XD That's kinda like my story! lol Except it's only three people and they're in a mansion.
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I love how you included Pyrrha early. My only question is why do you make her have a stutter? xD It was ok to have her do it when she's nervous, but there were parts where I was confused on how she was feeling. I can't wait to see her fight though. I love it so far!
 
CalibursEdge said:
I love how you included Pyrrha early. My only question is why do you make her have a stutter? xD It was ok to have her do it when she's nervous, but there were parts where I was confused on how she was feeling. I can't wait to see her fight though. I love it so far!
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Exactly. lol You'll figure it out sooner or later, but until then, I can't tell you. ;) And I'm currently writing the HG chap 1. And thanks sooooo much it means a lot to me! :)
 
HG sample of the first chapter. Tell me whatcha think.


Get off me! She had said. Let go! You bitch! It was you all along! You told Raphael to send me all of those things! I knew I could never trust you….. Wait a minute…. It really was you! You were next to me at the reaping! How could you? Do you know what I went through? I lost so many friends…..
CHAPTER 1. DISTRICT 12 TRIBUTES​
Viola was standing on the stage with Ivy, District 12’s representative. “Well than, shall we commence with the boys now?”
Everything was so blurry. The sea of people staring at her. The camera’s flashing. She looked through the crowd and found her best friend Cassandra. Cassandra had a distraught look on her face, most likely from grief or shock.
Viola felt like she wanted to vomit.
“Zwei Nightshade!” Ivy’s voice boomed over the speaker. Viola stared at Ivy. Her breasts were huge and her revealing outfits always showed too much cleavage. Ivy wore her hair down to her neck and her left bangs were longer than her right side’s. Her current outfit was dazzling. She had a top that covered the upper part of her breasts and that was short sleeved on one arm and long on the other.
Her pants all the way up to under her breast. One leg went to her thigh; the other went all the way down.
She had stockings on the leg without the pants and it had a gorgeous design.
Viola’s surroundings weren’t as beautiful as Ivy. Almost everything around her was a dull gray. The stage they were standing on was old and rickety. Ivy’s face was on the huge screen behind them.
For a second, when Viola saw the screen, Ivy looked ugly, most likely because of the water stains, tears and marks.
She could see a luscious green forest just outside the gate that they were all surrounded in, forced to attend the reaping.
When Viola realized who Ivy had just called with her seductive voice, she threw up. She didn’t literally throw up because her stomach had nothing to throw up. Her throat ached and her eyes itched.
She couldn’t tell whether this was real or fake; reality or fiction.
Zwei had a quite surprised look on his face, but he stood tall and walked up onto the stage next to Viola. She looked at him and when she saw the sorrow in his eyes, she almost cried.
Viola was never such an emotional person. Some might say she was cold hearted and indifferent.
But this was never true when it came to her friends.
“And there you have it folks! Zwei Nightshade and Viola Sorel! Will they survive? Or will they DIE an intense, gruesome yet spectacular death!? Stay tuned until next time! I’m your representative, IVY VALENTINE!!!!!!!” She went into a sexy but questionable pose for children to see as she screamed the last part.
“And don’t forget….” She smirked, looking even sexier with her sharp but pure red lipstick. “May the odds…” She paused.
"Ever, be in your favor....."


All of that is tentative to change.

P.S. All of the Soul Games participants (characters) are 12-18.
 
tee hee

It's like they're sharing a flat. Maybe it's that I never took the Hunger Games seriously, (that series did have some stuuuuupid names for things), but I get about two lines in and start to giggle like a wiener. Eh, maybe it's just my predisposition to fanfiction...
 
Dab_Of_Oppo said:
Every time I attempt to read fan fiction I just get this silly day dream that all the characters live in the same apartment complex or cul-de-sac...
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Speaking of, how do you feel about a slice-of-life story in a little apartment complex involving...

- Patroklos, run-of-the-mill college freshman; has an unhealthy crush on the blonde Japanese girl working at the yogurt place across the street and claims to be "more than average"
- Pyrrha, his older sister who lives with him; is incredibly timid and naive, has an awful history with suitors, and her current lovelife is worse than horribad
- Z.W.E.I., the current tenant of the apartment room who posted the rent availability in the papers; despite being brooding and intimidating in nature, very soft-spoken and open to his roommate Viola, otherwise he tends to be sarcastic and cynical; prone to grunting in reponse towards many questions and gets confused and frustrated fairly easily
- Viola, the other current tenant of the room; she is a proper lady with a cold nature and shares a sarcastic personality with Z.W.E.I., though they are very different when alone together; very intelligent and often can read people like a book, she has an intriguing fascination with the occult and conspiracy theories; her father insists she is a daddy's girl and pampers her so, but she thinks he's annoying and wants to get away from him; he also has a dislike for Z.W.E.I.

Of course, more characters to debut in later portions, but that's only if you all want to see this happen. ;)
 
Dab_Of_Oppo said:
Ah true, right. Then, there's no reason it couldn't work! Any story can work if it's done well.

What do you think about this title Fatal, "We who have Been: Misguided"
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Sounds interesting, definitely, but it looks better put this way: "We, Who Have Been Misguided".

unless of course, you have some sort of idea towards that subtitle
 
Fatal_Exodus said:
Sounds interesting, definitely, but it looks better put this way: "We, Who Have Been Misguided".

unless of course, you have some sort of idea towards that subtitle
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Yeah, like a second part of it, "We who have been: Forsaken"

its unlikely that's what it will be called.

Inquiry, if you saw and knew someone, lets say in school, who kept to themselves, and had continual one-sided conversations with thin air. What would you think of that person? Or what do you think middle school/elementary kids would think/do to the person?
 
Fatal_Exodus said:
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The idea is certainly intriguing. (Who's this japanese girl? ;D)
But what is your main goal/point for the plot or is it comedy type of story fatal? Either way, I'd be interested in reading it. :3
Ninjaguy446 said:
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Oh yea, I left you a review for your latest chapter ninja. It was alright but there was some lacking details. Your preview for chapter 5 looks promising and I hope you'll update soon. One thing I'd like to note is that you should slow down the pace alittle more. It seems alittle rushed.
 
Dab_Of_Oppo said:
Yeah, like a second part of it, "We who have been: Forsaken"

its unlikely that's what it will be called.

Inquiry, if you saw and knew someone, lets say in school, who kept to themselves, and had continual one-sided conversations with thin air. What would you think of that person? Or what do you think middle school/elementary kids would think/do to the person?
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I'd be slightly worried about them myself, but I wouldn't talk about them and I doubt anyone else would either unless they're royal jackasses.

darkwings13 said:
The idea is certainly intriguing. (Who's this japanese girl? ;D)
But what is your main goal/point for the plot or is it comedy type of story fatal? Either way, I'd be interested in reading it. :3
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It's definitely comedy, with bits and sprinkles of other genres added in. And I think it's not that hard to figure out who that blonde Japanese girl is. (Hint, it's not Setsuka ;D)
 
Fatal_Exodus said:
I'd be slightly worried about them myself, but I wouldn't talk about them and I doubt anyone else would either unless they're royal jackasses.
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Thanks, and the world is filled with jackasses (at least in my little corner of it)! That whole part of the story will take some further thought, or maybe you, I, and a few others are the empathic type.
 
Talisman said:
Do any of you get squeamish over sex in a ff ???
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Yes...Back in my earlier days I accidently read lemons (I had no idea wat that word meant) and it burned...XD
For now, I can take it. Because some of my favorite ff has one or two chapters in it about that and I don't mind as long as the rest of the story is good. ^-^
But for some, it just got overboard. A prime example would be the Anita Blake series (not a ff btw). It was one of the best things I've ever read until the author lost it at the fifth or six book. Before, she only had like one or two sex scene. Every book after that turned the main heroine into a whore who did it with practically every single man in the book. So if the book had like 800 pages. I had to flip through 600 of those pages of pointless sex. I was so disappointed...Oops, srry for the pointless rant talisman. So I guess you just have to make sure you don't overdo it :D
 
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